Sarnyn Posted December 24, 2009 Welcome Sarnyn to The Tao Bums and the Haiku Chain! ...as a chain, we must take the last line of the immediately previous haiku as our first line in ours and, as you have, stick to the 5-7-5 three line structure, just for the fun of it... So, I respectfully offer this patching haiku... there! rain on the roof... wet pavements reflect the foot something propels it I suppose that is my diction. I hear trusts and walked as a single syllable. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Taomeow Posted December 24, 2009 I suppose that is my diction. I hear trusts and walked as a single syllable. You are correct! So let's restore phonetic justice here! In the emptiness, the foot trusts the pavement walked, something propels it. Something propels it -- Rudolph the red-nosed reindeer, in all likelihood. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
trailmaker Posted December 24, 2009 You are correct! So let's restore phonetic justice here! Something propels it -- Rudolph the red-nosed reindeer, in all likelihood. in all likelihood realities imagined inspire thoughtful verse Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Apech Posted December 25, 2009 in all likelihood realities imagined inspire thoughtful verse inspire thoughtful verse you old man in a red coat stuck in my chimney. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
TheSongsofDistantEarth Posted December 25, 2009 stuck in my chimney put that in your pipe and smoke It had to be yooooou.... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Guest artform Posted December 25, 2009 (edited) I suppose that is my diction. I hear trusts and walked as a single syllable. Sorry if I wasn't clear. We accept trusts and walked as single syllables, as I thought I indicated when I said, "as you have done"...5-7-5 What I was pointing out and patching was back to the immediately previous hiaku's last line. You had quoted a January 2008 haiku by Celtic Dragon, rather than Trailmaker's with the last line: "there! rain on the roof". That is why I began with his line and re-spun your second to fit the mood, and ended with your last line intact, thus healing the chain structure of this haiku chain. Here we patch A7's missed last line back in post #2075, when Taomeow skipped it to return to your earlier one. It's like crochet or chess. Just that we like the chain to be linked if we claim it a chain. So here we start with the immediate previous and end with the missed last line and heal the chain again. Again, sorry not to have been clearer the first time. it had to be yooooou.... 'though there have been others too it just slipped my mind Edited December 25, 2009 by artform Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Apech Posted December 25, 2009 it had to be yooooou.... 'though there have been others too it just slipped my mind it just slipped my mind an small splash in the ocean the fish got away. (Happy Christmas Haiku lovers ) Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
C T Posted December 25, 2009 it just slipped my mind an small splash in the ocean the fish got away. (Happy Christmas Haiku lovers ) A peaceful Christmas and New Year to all! ............................................. The fish got away. Gone! Gone completely beyond into twenty ten.. ............................................. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Apech Posted December 25, 2009 ............................................. The fish got away. Gone! Gone completely beyond into twenty ten.. ............................................. into twenty ten... goes twice, which is dual truth, proves once is enough. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
C T Posted December 25, 2009 into twenty ten... goes twice, which is dual truth, proves once is enough. Proves once is enough? Tis never enough for some! The more the merrier.. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Guest artform Posted December 25, 2009 Proves once is enough? Tis never enough for some! The more the merrier.. the more the merrier happier less scarier best to all next year Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
C T Posted December 25, 2009 nice one there artform! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sarnyn Posted December 25, 2009 Sorry if I wasn't clear. We accept trusts and walked as single syllables, as I thought I indicated when I said, "as you have done"...5-7-5 What I was pointing out and patching was back to the immediately previous hiaku's last line. You had quoted a January 2008 haiku by Celtic Dragon, rather than Trailmaker's with the last line: "there! rain on the roof". That is why I began with his line and re-spun your second to fit the mood, and ended with your last line intact, thus healing the chain structure of this haiku chain. Here we patch A7's missed last line back in post #2075, when Taomeow skipped it to return to your earlier one. It's like crochet or chess. Just that we like the chain to be linked if we claim it a chain. So here we start with the immediate previous and end with the missed last line and heal the chain again. Again, sorry not to have been clearer the first time. it had to be yooooou.... 'though there have been others too it just slipped my mind lol my bad homie, i don't know how that happened, I thought I had looked at the last one, but I guess not, sorry for rattling/jerking/breaking the chain! Good fix though, and this is fun! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Apech Posted December 25, 2009 the more the merrier happier less scarier best to all next year best to all next year yellow sun on purple hills dry wind stirs the dust. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
C T Posted December 26, 2009 best to all next year yellow sun on purple hills dry wind stirs the dust. Dry wind stirs the dust Only to settle once more when the rains arrive.. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sarnyn Posted December 26, 2009 Dry wind stirs the dust Only to settle once more when the rains arrive.. when the rains arrive, mirrors make inverted worlds, each reflecting each. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Apech Posted December 26, 2009 when the rains arrive, mirrors make inverted worlds, each reflecting each. nice one! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Taomeow Posted December 26, 2009 when the rains arrive, mirrors make inverted worlds, each reflecting each. Each reflecting each: In the Heaven of Indra, there's a string of pearls... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
mYTHmAKER Posted December 26, 2009 Each reflecting each: In the Heaven of Indra, there's a string of pearls... There's a string of pearls... connected to each other Krishna bathed in blue Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Mark Foote Posted December 26, 2009 There's a string of pearls... connected to each other Krishna bathed in blue Krishna bathed in blue a thousand spires of sunlight trailing in the dark Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Guest paul walter Posted December 26, 2009 Krishna bathed in blue a thousand spires of sunlight trailing in the dark Trailing in the dark why so sad every night? -mid-summer shadow Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
C T Posted December 26, 2009 (edited) Trailing in the dark why so sad every night? -mid-summer shadow Mid-summer shadow Cast not thy gaze on the Bright Ye are unready.. Edited December 26, 2009 by CowTao Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Guest artform Posted December 26, 2009 Mid-summer shadow Cast not thy gaze on the Bright Ye are unready.. ye are unready... rest, relax and resonate write a line or two all the best wandering and wondering in 2010 all artform Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Mark Foote Posted December 26, 2009 ye are unready... rest, relax and resonate write a line or two all the best wandering and wondering in 2010 all artform write a line or two go with the flow, resonate leave this world behind Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sarnyn Posted December 26, 2009 write a line or two go with the flow, resonate leave this world behind leave this world behind, walking out of the self's skins, ah shit, still here, damn. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
