Haiku Chain

[MudLotus]

acorns and drops them

what helps take the bitters out

so's ya can eat 'em

 

(whew!)

 

so's ya can eat 'em,

ya gotta cook 'em way long

like they did back when

 

like they did back when

we will do again, but now

iron in the fire

 

 

iron in the fire

Spittle on griddle bounces.

Flapjacks for Buddha!

[Mark Foote]

iron in the fire

Spittle on griddle bounces.

Flapjacks for Buddha!

 

flapjacks for buddha

and his entourage- mostly

squirrels and bluejays

[Apech]

flapjacks for buddha

and his entourage- mostly

squirrels and bluejays

 

squirrels and bluejays,

who says nature's under threat?

two animals left.

[Ninpo-me-this-ninjutsu-me-that]

squirrels and bluejays,

who says nature's under threat?

two animals left.

 

Squirrels and bluejays

 

Add some salt

 

It becomes a tasty meal

[Apech]

Squirrels and bluejays

 

Add some salt

 

It becomes a tasty meal

 

You haven't got this Haiku thing sussed have you.

[trailmaker]

You haven't got this Haiku thing sussed have you.

 

Right - function follows form - here, content wrapped up in 5-7-5-syllable lines is the way.

[Mark Foote]

Squirrels and bluejays

 

Add some salt

 

It becomes a tasty meal

 

squirrels and bluejays

become a v. tasty meal

add some salt, buddha

 

(on the Tricycle haiku corner, I read that the 5-7-5 formula doesn't translate directly into English- I didn't follow the logic exactly, but on that site they were willing to consider other combinations. Myself, I kinda like the 5-7-5...)

Edited November 16, 2010 by Mark Foote

[Apech]

 

(on the Tricycle haiku corner, I read that the 5-7-5 formula doesn't translate directly into English- I didn't follow the logic exactly, but on that site they were willing to consider other combinations. Myself, I kinda like the 5-7-5...)

 

I agree its neater to stick to the form - even though it gets a bit tricky ... if we abandon it ... we might as well have a free-form poetry thread (which would be ok but this one should stick to 5,7,5 IMO).

[Mark Foote]

I agree its neater to stick to the form - even though it gets a bit tricky ... if we abandon it ... we might as well have a free-form poetry thread (which would be ok but this one should stick to 5,7,5 IMO).

 

Yes, I think 5-7-5 has worked amazingly well for us here, and I've had way too much fun with it to quit now...

 

add some salt, buddha,

mark some time; you don't even

know what time it is

[trailmaker]

know what time it is

within a haiku, a moment

captured, unfolding

[Apech]

know what time it is

within a haiku, a moment

captured, unfolding

 

captured, unfolding

the emerging butterfly

is cupped in my hand.

[Mark Foote]

captured, unfolding

the emerging butterfly

is cupped in my hand.

 

is cupped in my hand

is as frail as life itself

where is my good heart

[Stigweard]

is cupped in my hand

is as frail as life itself

where is my good heart

 

where is my good heart

under which mushroom is it

darstedly fairies

[trailmaker]

where is my good heart

under which mushroom is it

darstedly fairies

 

darstedly fairies

the impish 'little people'

play tricks on your mind

[Apech]

darstedly fairies

the impish 'little people'

play tricks on your mind

 

play tricks on your mind

it's dependent arising

now nothing makes sense.

[strawdog65]

play tricks on your mind

it's dependent arising

now nothing makes sense.

 

 

 

Now nothing makes sense

Blind sight together unseen

Waves crashing on rocks

[Apech]

Now nothing makes sense

Blind sight together unseen

Waves crashing on rocks

 

Waves crashing on rocks

I just wonder why the rocks

Don't ever fight back.

[Mark Foote]

Waves crashing on rocks

I just wonder why the rocks

Don't ever fight back.

 

don't ever fight back

no biting, kicking, clawing

just sit there, take it

[Taomeow]

don't ever fight back

no biting, kicking, clawing

just sit there, take it

 

Just sit there, take it --

when they cut you down, forest,

take their oxygen

[strawdog65]

Just sit there, take it --

when they cut you down, forest,

take their oxygen

 

 

 

Take their oxygen,

Inhale deeply breath of life,

Exhale only Tao

[Apech]

Take their oxygen,

Inhale deeply breath of life,

Exhale only Tao

 

Exhale only Tao

Or maybe the Tao itself

Is exhaling you.

[strawdog65]

Exhale only Tao

Or maybe the Tao itself

Is exhaling you.

 

 

 

Is exhaling you,

The only true Way of Tao?

I think not, but exist.

[Mark Foote]

Is exhaling you,

The only true Way of Tao?

I think not, but exist.

 

I think not, but exist

one at a time, two at once,

three together- akh

 

three together- akh

alchemy undone, dead tree

knot holes played by wind

Edited November 22, 2010 by Mark Foote

[C T]

I think not, but exist

one at a time, two at once,

three together- akh

 

three together- akh

alchemy undone, dead tree

knot holes played by wind

knot-holes played by wind

making groovy, earthy sounds

huge didgeridoos...

[Apech]

knot-holes played by wind

making groovy, earthy sounds

huge didgeridoos...

 

huge didgeridoos...

tiny aborigines

but one size fits all.