VeeCee Posted January 13, 2008 His eyes are silent And his mind even more so Connect to the source Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
rain Posted January 13, 2008 (edited) oh.. veecee - you beat me.. but i post it anyway his eyes are silent movies playing magic scenes from a life undone Edited January 14, 2008 by rain Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
VeeCee Posted January 13, 2008 from [a] life undone to a life completely lived what is the secret Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Stigweard Posted January 13, 2008 what is the secret to the way nightinggales sing? a cry in the night Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
mYTHmAKER Posted January 13, 2008 what is the secret to the way nightinggales sing? a cry in the night a cry in the night heaven above and below I hear the silence Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Mal Posted January 14, 2008 I hear the silence My beating heart seeks stillness I am not here now Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
doc benway Posted January 14, 2008 I am not here now Nor ever was, nor will be... A loon calls at dusk Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
mYTHmAKER Posted January 14, 2008 I am not here now Nor ever was, nor will be... A loon calls at dusk A loon calls at dusk a sweet sound, it stops my mind the fruit has ripened Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
doc benway Posted January 14, 2008 The fruit has ripened and ascends to heaven's gate "I" am left behind... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Celtic Dragon Posted January 14, 2008 The fruit has ripened and ascends to heaven's gate "I" am left behind... "I" am left behind... To ponder my existence In the emptiness Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Mal Posted January 14, 2008 In the emptiness All is revealed to me What is hidden now? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
mYTHmAKER Posted January 14, 2008 What is hidden now? Asking what is hidden now, nothing is revealed. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Wayfarer64 Posted January 14, 2008 nothing is revealed only icicles dripping into a puddle Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Taomeow Posted January 14, 2008 (edited) Little1 said: (all the haiku i ever read were about catching glimpses on nature, just so. get a load of how we, as westerners, transform it into a cry of subjectiveness. i will try to repare some of the harm done to the good name of haiku ) That's because they wrote about what they were interacting with, and we write about what we are interacting with. I wouldn't attempt to write a stylistically Chinese-identical haiku in English in any event because it's absolutely impossible -- a haiku is a visual image first and foremost, its calligraphy is part of its overall artistic design. It is really an exquisite multimedia art form, and it is impossible to replicate in any Romano-Germanic or Slavic or Finno-Ugric, etc., language. Written Chinese was being developed as, among other things, a form of art for millennia. Written English is anything but. (I'm aware of only one American poet who attempted to draw pictures by shaping the lines of his poems into an image -- George Starbuck. He's an excellent and complex and therefore nearly universally unknown poet -- I believe by far the best American poet of the 20th century -- but still this attempt of his at doing art with the written English text is laughable.) Emperor Kangxi, when the Jesuit missionaries showed him the holy bible for the first time, couldn't believe it's their sacred book. "The lines look as though they were left by a bunch of cockroaches scurrying across a dusty table," he said. He meant no disrespect, in fact he opened China to Christian missionaries for the first time in history -- he was just commenting on the visual impact of the pages. Edited July 17, 2020 by Taomeow Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
宁 Posted January 14, 2008 very interesting i think yet another principle was not putting the self inside it, just merely hinting it, as there was someone to observe the scene, but you couldnt tell how was that person... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Stigweard Posted January 14, 2008 very interesting i think yet another principle was not putting the self inside it, just merely hinting it, as there was someone to observe the scene, but you couldnt tell how was that person... A little like this perhaps.... into a puddle the raindrops begin to fall reflection distorts Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Mal Posted January 14, 2008 reflection distorts the spontaneously nature of the haiku fun Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Yoda Posted January 14, 2008 he was just commenting on the visual impact of the pages. Anyone? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Wayfarer64 Posted January 14, 2008 (edited) I assume that the visual impact was all that he could relate to unless he could read the Euro language without translation Reflection distorts puddles are but stepping stones Lightning but signposts Edited January 15, 2008 by Wayfarer64 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
mYTHmAKER Posted January 14, 2008 Lightning but sign posts. Difficult line to follow A bird plays it's form. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Mal Posted January 14, 2008 Emperor Kangxi, when the Jesuit missionaries showed him the holy bible for the first time, couldn't believe it's their sacred book. "The lines look as though they were left by a bunch of cockroaches scurrying across a dusty table," he said. He meant no disrespect, in fact he opened China to Christian missionaries for the first time in history -- he was just commenting on the visual impact of the pages. Anyone? Imprints left behind by cockroaches in the dust what meaning is there 1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Wayfarer64 Posted January 15, 2008 (edited) How about - Cockroaches scamper tiny marks on wind blown sand A new path made clear Edited January 15, 2008 by Wayfarer64 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Mal Posted January 15, 2008 Nice 1 I love this thread, apologies to the people who have to read my poems Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
rain Posted January 15, 2008 (edited) .........mmm....... a new path made clear forever coming never leaving all ways there Edited January 15, 2008 by rain Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Stigweard Posted January 15, 2008 leaving all ways there I take the road less travelled the path of power Share this post Link to post Share on other sites