Stigweard

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stretching forever

bending and contorting things

I'll need a doctor...

 

I'll need a doctor

afflicted with bigamy

to heal -- or get lost

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to heal -- or get lost

the look in my puppy's eye

haunts me to this day...

 

haunts me to this day

the deeds of my violent past

gone but not forgot

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haunts me to this day

the deeds of my violent past

gone but not forgot

gone but not forgot

dreams are but hidden cravings

of tea and biscuits

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some Tin Tin also:

Don't forget Iron Iron!

Other metals, too.

 

other metals to

and gold is for the mistress

silver for the maid

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other metals to

and gold is for the mistress

silver for the maid

silver for the maid

droplets of blood for the Count

a feast for the eyes

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a feast for the eyes

Firey blaze of chaos

Celestial Earth

 

Celestial Earth

Leaving all the gods behind ~

Vanish in the mist

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small request - please lets try to get the syllable right - thanks!

 

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5-7-5 right?

 

Ce-les-ti-al-Earth 5

Lea-ving-all-the-gods-behind 7

Van-ish-in-the-mist 5

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Rene, yours was spot on.. but #7005 seems to have fallen short.. sorry

 

 

ps.. i think 'celestial' is actually 3 syllables

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Rene, yours was spot on.. but #7005 seems to have fallen short.. sorry

 

 

ps.. i think 'celestial' is actually 3 syllables

 

You must be on the other side of the pond (-:

 

Here, celestial is 4, and firey is 3

 

#7005:

a-feast-for-the-eyes 5

Fi-r-ey-blaze-of-cha-os 7

Ce-les-ti-al-Earth 5

 

Still, your good intent (5)

Is most appreciated (7)

given our lame trys. (5)

 

(-:

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vanish in the mist

foggy as always, out there

given our lame tries

 

 

given our lame tries

nevertheless, you did well

of course you are right

 

 

of course you are right

please accept apology

i'll STFU

 

 

i'll STFU

stand to the side and observe

the train passing by

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staring back at me

friends and lovers times gone by

only whispers now

 

Only whispers now

Where once words thundered aloud

Storm calm anger peace

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Only whispers now

Where once words thundered aloud

Storm calm anger peace

 

 

Storm calm anger peace,

that's what's called duality

of that, again, I'll be free

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Storm calm anger peace,

that's what's called duality

of that, again, I'll be free

of that, again, i'll be free

free of the many mind threads

like a web unspun

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of that, again, i'll be free

free of the many mind threads

like a web unspun

 

like a web unspun

i wait peacefully here, for

the weaver to come

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"cel-less-chul" sounds illiterate.

 

"Cel-es-tea-al" sounds elegant.

 

I'm going to go right on doing the elegant thing, no offense.

 

 

 

sure, feel free to decide and input your own number of syllables, don't let the generally accepted norms stop you.

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The norms stop you now,

but they will not forever,

you're meant to be free.

 

You’re meant to be free

What then pray is the problem

Wear your chains with pride

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